What a great little piece with a spooky twist! I like how the story draws you in before hitting you with the climax. Be careful what you wish for!

One advantage short plays have over longer affairs is that the audience often goes in completely blind. This horror story is mostly effective because it's not clearly a horror story... until it's too late. Once the trap is sprung and the protagonist's fate is sealed, we're just as surprised as they are. Well done!

The suspense in this short play builds creepily, and just when I thought I felt sure I knew where it was going, Rachel spins things and hits me with an ending that is both a surprise and entirely fitting! No easy feat, to be sure. This would be perfect for a Halloween or horror-themed festival, but it also could stand alone as a wonderful drama that's also a scary take on morality tales. Would love to see this staged!